Do you look the war between Israël and Palestine on the TV ?
Unlike other countries, Israël and Palestine don't want to stop the war between them.
I don't know realy why they do the war but I think that it's not a solution for them, for their trouble, for the people who live in Palestine and in Israël.
I believe that if they would speak together about their problems, things would be better.
When we see the massacre which they do, the people who cry and the people who are wounded, it's realy a bad story.
And I think that on the TV, they don't show all the massacre.
The worst is that the people who do the war, will have never enough and that the people who die haden't do something :: There're inocent !
You should think about a better futur.
I have juste one thing to say:
YOU SHOULD STOP YOUR WAR FOR THE GOOD FEEL OF THE WORLD !
By Marion_#
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Marion,
Excellent work - full of emotion and good ideas.
Well done!
Robyn
Now, here are some of my suggestions:
Are you watching/following the war between Israël and Palestine on the TV ? (present continuous - temporary action)
Unlike other countries, Israël and Palestine don't want to stop their war.
I don't really know why they are doing the war but I think that it's not a solution for them, for their trouble, for the people who live in Palestine and in Israël.
I believe that if they would speak together about their problems, things would be better.
When we see the results of the massacres, the people who cry and the people who are wounded, we realise that it's really a bad situation.
And I think that on the TV, they don't show all the massacres.
The worst is that the people who do the war will have never enough and that the people who die haven't done anything: They're innocent !
You should think about a better future.
I have just one more thing to say:
YOU SHOULD STOP YOUR WAR FOR THE GOOD OF THE WORLD !
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